
“Have a good time and call me when you’re ready to be picked up.”
“I will, Mom.” Ricky dodged his mother’s attempt to kiss him in front of his friend Jimmy. Jeesh. It was bad enough that he had to go to the school carnival instead of trick-or-treating like the rest of his friends; did she have to embarrass him too?
“There’s just baby stuff here,” Jimmy said.
Ricky was inclined to agree as he looked around. Their mothers had decided that this was safer than going around the neighborhood knocking on doors. He was willing to bet that they were the only two ten-year-olds dressed in costume. Everyone else was much younger. Come Monday, they’d be the laughing stock at school.
“We’re doomed.”
Some kid in a bed sheet kept following them around as they made their way down the line of booths passing out candy. Ricky nudged Jimmy and whispered in his ear. Jimmy grinned as they walked over to a quiet spot between the buildings. The bed sheet ghost followed them.
“Okay. Why are you following us?” Ricky said.
The ghost didn’t answer, just stood there fidgeting as he looked up at them out of the two eyeholes. Jimmy tugged the sheet off, revealing a small, grimy boy.
There was something weird about this kid, Ricky thought.
“Say something, creep.”
The kid smiled, a rather ghastly-looking occurrence, as he spoke.
“Braiiiinnsss…”
©2009 Laura Eno
Ahhhhhhh!!! Love it, Laura! I swear! You never fail to deliver with these! I look forward to your #fridayflash every week. :)
ReplyDeleteI especially love how you altered your writing voice to sound as if you really were a 10 year old.
Great job.
Pop! And out come the zombies! I was gonna, but I didn't. Silly, fickle muse. Thanks for the flash. I like em. =)
ReplyDeleteAww, a little zombie!
ReplyDeleteWonderful flash. You always come through!
Great little story. Very appropriate considering how close we are to halloween.
ReplyDeleteAwe, a cute little zombie boy! I want one :-) Okay, well maybe not, he might be harder to feed than the monsters I currently have. I don't know why, but this gave me warm fuzzies. hehe.
ReplyDeleteHurra for brains!!!
ReplyDeletelol, what is it about small zombies that makes one go, Awwww?
ReplyDeleteVery entertaining as always, madam - the Galactic Overlord doffs his cap to you
Hey, if it's Halloween, couldn't zombie kid just go out as himself? The kid isn't necessarily a zombie either,he could just be weird. Either case, I think the 2 ten year olds could probably kick his butt!
ReplyDeleteCute!
A cute zombie...now that's a first!
ReplyDeleteI was instantly endeared to this little zombie...until he smiled :-)
ReplyDeleteIt's the cute little zombies that will eat your brains. ;) Thanks for reading, everyone!
ReplyDeleteAt least he wasn't after any candy!
ReplyDeleteI do love me a zombie story.
these crazy people commenting "Awwww"
ReplyDeletebet you woulnt say that, if the little blighter popped open your skull !
This made me laugh out loud.
Oh no! I didn't see that coming LOL Well done...spooky kids are the best.
ReplyDeleteUh-oh! Looks like Ricky and Jimmy might have uncovered more than they bargained for. Good job, Laura.
ReplyDeleteI guess they left out "this party is BYOBrain" in the flyer for the moms....is NOWHERE safe from zombies?
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I love zombie stories. I just want to give the kid a coochie-coo under his chin. Another good one Laura, as if there were any doubt.
ReplyDelete~chris
After recently watching Zombieland, I can't help but be flooded with grim-toothed zombie smiles :)
ReplyDeleteHa! Braiiiinnsss! Too cool, Laura. I often terrorize my own children as a zombie in our home. Although sometimes I scream "Liveeeeeerrr!" for variety.
ReplyDeleteLove it Laura! My son is 10 and I could easily picture him as Ricky, could even see the scare on his face (see my avatar on my blog - that's it!) as he realized his demise.
ReplyDeleteAwesome!
Cute! I love it.
ReplyDeleteAww, a mini zombie. Cute! By the time I realized he was a zombie, he'd have had my brains.
ReplyDeleteWho says kids are picky eaters! Goal, again!
ReplyDeleteYIKES! Looks like the kids at school are the least of their problems!
ReplyDelete“Braiiiinnsss…”
ReplyDeleteBwaahahah...
Beautiful. I love it.
I used to attend one of these functions as a kid, and we had to close our eyes and stick our hand in a bowl of peeled grapes for eyeballs, or spaghetti for brains and guess what it was as some wierd old man told a spooky story - it always scared the shit out of me.
ReplyDeleteLittle kids ARE creepy.
How cute - a zombino! Short, sweet, and sassy. Peace, Linda
ReplyDeleteI guess these two are about to find out if baby zombies are as dangerous as grown up zombies. Great story!
ReplyDeleteIs the ghost taking them? Or giving them? Aaakkk. Cute Halloween fare.
ReplyDeleteHelen
Straight From Hel
Hee Hee! And here I was expecting a little charlie brown I got rocks boy. Instead, it's a charlie brown I want your braiiinnnnss boy!
ReplyDeleteGreat treat this week!
Yup. They're doomed!
ReplyDeleteSo much for having a boring night. It really is the first day of the rest of their eternal unlives. Pity. I wanted their candy! :P
ReplyDeleteI guess they come in all sizes! Clever little zombie, that. Had me laughing out loud.
ReplyDelete~jon
Excellent but then I'm a sucka for zombies :-)
ReplyDeleteParents never understand anything, do they? :)
ReplyDeleteLooks like our two heroes are in trouble. If they survive they're going to have a great story for school.
You will let them survive, won't you Laura? ... Laura?
Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
ReplyDeleteHaha. Zombies, yay!
ReplyDeleteHaha, what a cute little story. A zombie pretending to be a ghost, go figure!
ReplyDeleteHa! Love that last line.
ReplyDeleteNothing but baby stuff there, huh? Then you laid a fat one on us ... “Braiiiinnsss…” Those babies are going to grow up real quick. If they survive. Good Halloween story, Laura.
ReplyDeleteJeff Posey
Heh, that was good. Nice ending!
ReplyDeleteFirst, I will say that Halloween caters exactly to your writing sensibility.
ReplyDeleteSecond, your pieces remind me of those nesting Ukrainian dolls. Horror, within cuteness, within horror.
As usual, nice job, Laura. You should be selling these, you know.
This one was cute. And Hope laid down such a great compliment in, "Second, your pieces remind me of those nesting Ukrainian dolls. Horror, within cuteness, within horror."
ReplyDeleteAnd once again it's out of the park...or is that carnival grounds. Either way, this one is a winner.
ReplyDeleteAnd once again it's out of the park...or is that carnival grounds. Either way, this one is a winner.
ReplyDeleteYour comments are wonderful, thank you all!
ReplyDeleteHi Laura,
ReplyDeleteStopping by again to give apologies for the broken link in my post today. Here is the correct link:
http://www.capecodtoday.com/blogs/index.php/2009/02/16/chatham-author-lisa-genova-hits-best-sel?blog=53
Helen
Straight From Hel
There is something about this that reminds a bit of Encyclopedia Brown...without the happy ending. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteSo much for the safe school carnival. Great, great ending! Really fun. The quote "We're doomed." brought up images of Charlie Brown, but I don't suppose Linus ever ate brains.
ReplyDeleteShort and sweet. The simplicity working on prior knowledge swings a big hit. This is a good example of 'less is more.'
ReplyDeleteHilarious!
ReplyDeleteHooray for zombies! :-) Really enjoyed this one! Thanks for sharing it!
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading and commenting everyone!
ReplyDeleteZombie ghosts? AWESOME.
ReplyDeleteCarrie - Next time I'll have to make it sparkly too. :) Thanks for stopping by!
ReplyDeleteAHHHH! Zombie Ghost!!!
ReplyDeleteVery cute, Laura :)
Ha! Let those other kids laugh at them now...
ReplyDeleteShort, sweet, and funny. :)
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Thanks for stopping by, Dana and Cecilia!
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