Thursday, October 8, 2009

Graveyard Tales - #FridayFlash



“Let’s play a trick on Tommy.”

It was Halloween and Mike had planned on hanging out with his two best friends. His parents had other ideas though. They insisted that he take his little brother trick or treating. At seven, Tommy was five years younger than they were and a big crybaby, so when Steve and Chad came by the house Mike was ready with his plan.

“What do you have in mind?” Steve asked.

“Let’s play a game of hide and seek in the old cemetery with him.” Mike grinned as both Steve and Chad looked askance. No one went into the place at night. Its rundown appearance gave rise to tales of haunting and general mayhem. No one had been buried there for over fifty years.

“When he walks by, we’ll grab his legs and scare the crap out of him.”

When told about the hide and seek game, Tommy started blubbering but finally agreed, since it was the price to go out with the older boys. They all slipped past the loose chain on the gate and snuck onto the grounds. The full moon made the old headstones shimmy and dance as if alive when the tree branches swayed in the wind, throwing shadows at odd moments.

While Tommy counted to one hundred the others hid, each waiting for the chance to scare the big baby. Tommy yelled, “Here I come” and started walking.

He soon let out a blood-curdling yell as something grabbed his leg. Steve and Chad both popped out of their hiding places in fits of laughter. Their laughter died as they realized that Mike was nowhere to be found.

“Something reached out of the ground and grabbed me,” Tommy said. He started crying again. “Where’s Mike?”

Another scream split the air, farther into the graveyard. The older boys smiled. Mike was still up to his tricks. They headed in that direction, dragging a reluctant Tommy with them.

After searching, the boys couldn’t find Mike anywhere. They stumbled upon a fresh mound of dirt over one of the graves. Scared now, they ran back to Mike’s house, telling his parents about the fresh grave and the fact that Mike was now missing.

The police arrived, delivering Mike, whom they’d caught exiting the graveyard. He confessed to his practical joke, finding no one particularly amused by it and earning months of restriction for his troubles.

“I still have one question,” Tommy said, after the police had left. “If Mike was at the back of the graveyard, who grabbed my leg?”

48 comments:

  1. Always someone called Mike!

    All that was missing was the marshmellows and the camp fire
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  2. Spooky! And mean Mike. Tut tut!!
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  3. I grew up about 2 blocks from the local cemetary. We used to play there at night, much to the keeper's distaste.

    There was always a Mike in our group too... trouble.

    Always a pleasure, Laura.
    ~2
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  4. Who indeed grabbed his leg? The man under the fresh mound? Maybe Tommy grabbed his own leg?

    I don't know, but I do know you had me right there. I've been there. Right in that cemetery with them. I stopped even seeing your words and fell, immersed, into your story. That means it's darned good.

    Jeff Posey
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  5. I agree with Jeff. It's really a very good -- and SCARY -- story.

    I always enjoy your work!
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  6. Boy do I love a good old-fashioned kids playing games in the cemetary story. That was wonderful. Yes, I too, was right there in the cemetary with them. Good story Laura!
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  7. Great spooky tale. I could hear the children scream. And yes, there is always a troublesome Mike.
    ~chris
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  8. zombies, tree branches, blackberry bramble? It's all the same when you're in the graveyard at night.

    Spooky tale, Laura!
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  9. Oooh, creepy. Who indeed?

    I like how you twisted and twisted this piece.
    ~jon
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  10. I think the butler grabbed his leg. It's always the butler, isn't it?

    Nice one!
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  11. Well done, Laura. A nice primer to get us in the mood for this halloween season.
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  12. Heh-heh-heh... now I'm in the mood for tricking and treating! Peace, Linda
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  13. OH, I just love ghost stories! I'm so going to enjoy this Halloween with treats like these! This story made me want to go walk through a graveyard at night...anyone? Just me? wahahaha :-)
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  14. You do wish Mike got his comeuppance at the end :-) - being sucked into a grave would have done it - but nice engaging piece, well done.
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  15. Well this is ace, as kids their age would say in the UK :)
    I confess to rather liking Mike and his particular brand of evil...

    Very topical too!

    A proper campfire tale (and Bingo was his name-oh), and I'm so tempted to go graveyard creeping with my mates this weekend...
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  16. Nice. You leave it ambiguous as to what's really out there.
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  17. Heh, heh - Thank you all for reading and the kind words. For those of you that know my writing well, it won't surprise you to know that I buried Mike in that grave in the first version...but I thought I'd be nice to him and let him live.
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  18. Hehehe. A nice little spook story for Halloween. Gotta love the timing of it if nothing else. I do also like to see pranksters getting punished, even if it is still kinda creepy that they dunno who grabbed Tommy!
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  19. It was me! I did it. Captures the playful, slightly mean side of childhood very well. Made me feel like a kid again (still?).
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  20. I grew up right across the street from Copps Hill Burial Ground in Boston so I was placed instantly in your tale. Would like to know who grabbed Tommy's foot! A part II? Do the boys go back to find out?
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  21. Great story Laura, but the darker part of me wants to see the story end with Mike in the fresh grave. You are more merciful than I would have been :)
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  22. Creepy.

    Back in my youth I stepped on the edge of an old grave and my foot went down into it right up to my knee. This reminded me of that. I will have cold shivers for the rest of the day.
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  23. The thing that grabbed his leg was just someone wanting to borrow a piece of paper and a crayon so they could do a "rubbing" on a headstone.....

    I have to admit that you letting mike live surprised me...lol...

    Nice job!
    Karen :0)
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  24. I enjoyed your description of the graveyard. And yay for Halloween flash fiction.
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  25. It must be close to Halloween! Good job, Laura. Goblins in the grave - what a concept.
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  26. Ah, for shame that you let Mike live in this version. In a Halloween season, somebody needs to die. ;)

    Good stuff, Laura.
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  27. Another of your interesting (and now spooky) tales. I loved the involvement of the younger brother, and I do kind of wish that Mike would have ended up in the grave... Ah, the mysteries are swirling about in my mind already!
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  28. I love scary stories. Nice work. I loved the ending.
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  29. Got me excited in the first couple of paragraphs. It's early October and the Halloween-inspired fiction is already starting to appear! God bless you for your little creepy story, Ms. Eno. Forget Christmas. This is the most wonderful time of the year, and I don't care if you were only pulling my leg.
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  30. I love halloween, I get to read all kinds of wonderful stories like this :) Fun stuff!
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  31. Zombies. Or Magwich. Probably Ol' Magwich.
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  32. I always love a question at the end. Hmmm...who could it have been :)
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  33. I so want to visit that graveyard! This was a fun one to read. Nicely done!
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  34. [scroll scroll scroll]

    Lots of comments for the master of Flash!

    You did not disappoint again. ANd "O.O" Who did?

    Darn these abbreviated flash stories. =P
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  35. I know who grabbed his leg. Laura did it. She does it every Friday (or should I say Thursday?) night.

    Your comment that Mike was buried in the first version made me smile. His little practical joke did seem a bit like you winking at us, around this virtual campfire.
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  36. Nothing like getting one's leg pulled, especially in a graveyard!
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  37. Haha, I would've killed him off first version, too. It's got a nice balance between explanation and continued mystery.
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  38. Oh dear me. I think we should send Mike back to the graveyard to find out who's the phantom leg grabber.

    A fun tale, Laura.
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  39. Interesting take on some old childhood fears...things that go bump in the night mixed in with a wicked little prank...such fun.
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  40. A great way to get into the Halloween spirit - thanks!
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  41. I can see from the comments that I'm going to have to kill someone next week for sure. :) Thank you everybody!
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  42. oooh. A proper Halloween chiller.
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  43. Cemetery's scare me. A spine chilling story.
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  44. Very good question. And very good way to end the tale!

    Helen
    Straight From Hel
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  45. Ha, really liked this! :-) Reminded me of an episode of "Are You Afraid of the Dark?" Great job!
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  46. Thank you for all the wonderful comments! :)
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